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This is the thread for anyone writing lyrics or poetry who wants their work or get help with it.

I'll start it off with some lyrics from the musical I'm writing. It's almost done, except for one line where I'm struggling to come up with a fitting line that rhymes, and doesn't use a rhyme I've already used in the other choruses

And finally, the lyrics:
Quote:
Song 2: How a Princess Should Be

{Intro}
INÉS:
♪You’re a rather unconventional princess
With your strange sword fighting obsession, and your manners so carefree
But you have to understand, no matter what views you express
That’s not how a princess should be

{Verse}
Princesses always have a smile kept on their face
For the day when their prince comes, just in case
He's come there searching for a bride to embrace
But he wouldn’t consider you, He would simply say 'Ew!'

You see, princesses always wear their crown and fancy dress
For appearance they must dress in excess
To flaunt the regal beauty they all possess
But you’re not too nice on the eyes wearing the same clothes as the guys!

SARINA:
{Chorus}
♪Hey! There’s no, no way
I’m gonna be a princess like you say
Not gonna wait around here every day
Just for some prince to whisk me away

INÉS:
♪That’s how a princess should be!

[SARINA gets frustrated]

ARMANDO:
[To SERVANTS] Has she always been like this?

SERVANT 1:
Oh yes.
{Verse}
♪Six years ago a boy approached her at a ball.

SERVANT 2:
♪Said one word and got shoved into the wall

SERVANT 3:
♪She's done that every time that I can recall

SERVANTS 1, 2, & 3:
♪So if you wanna be her knight, you better be up for a fight!


KNIGHT CAPTAIN 1:
♪You would think when she grew up every man would want her hand

KNIGHT CAPTAIN 2:
♪And her beauty would shine throughout the land

KNIGHT CAPTAIN 1:
♪But her aggression’s more than I can withstand

KNIGHT CAPTAIN 2:
♪Yeah, just look at this brat

KNIGHT CAPTAINS 1 & 2:
♪Why would I want to marry that?!

CHORUS:
{Chorus}
♪There's no, no way
She’s gonna be a princess like we say
She’s never gonna get a fiancé
Cause her foul temper keeps them at bay

MEN IN GROUP 3:
[Backing away from SARINA]
Not how a princess should be!

{Bridge}
ARCHPRIESTESS 1:
♪When I think about a princess I think fairness and grace

ARCHPRISTESS 2:
♪And a lady who is selfless and refined

ARCHPRIESTESS 3:
♪But instead of having manners and a kindly face
This one's violently inclined...

INÉS:
{Verse}
♪Yes, I'll admit their words do sound a little strong
But they're right; you've been living your life wrong
You’ve been behaving with no thought for so long
That in all your lack of care, you’ve cast aside your welfare

Just guess why right now you are the most loathed person here
And why you are the target of their jeers
You’re far too spirited and headstrong, my dear
Yes, and no one likes a girl who takes charge of her own world!

CHORUS:
{Chorus}
♪There’s no, no way
She’s gonna be a princess like we say
She does whatever she thinks is okay
[This is the line I'm stuck on]

GROUP 3:
♪Not how a princess should be

{A different bridge}
SERVANTS:
♪Princesses obey and never raise their voices

KNIGHT CAPTAINS:
♪Princesses always are kind and polite

ARCHPRIESTESSES:
♪Princesses aren’t supposed to make their own choices

ALL CHORUS:
♪And princesses don't swordfight

SARINA:
I can do what I like and I don’t care what you say. I’m NEVER going to change for any of you.


CHORUS:
{Chorus}
[TO INÉS]
♪Then there’s no, no way
She’s gonna be a princess like you say
It doesn't matter how hard you might pray
This is the way she always will stay
(Not how a princess should be.)

INÉS:
{Slow Break}
♪ What happened to my little princess?
That 7 year old little girl with a happy smiley face
Out of the kindness of my heart, I took you out of distress
I never thought you'd grow up to be such a disgrace

But now you need to try your best to set things right
You’ve got to turn into a princess by tomorrow night
It’s time for you to act more inactively

CHORUS AND INÉS:
♪Because that’s how a princess should be

{Outro}
GROUP 3:
♪No, No way

GROUP 4:
♪That’s how a princess should be

GROUP 3:
♪ No, No way

GROUP 4:
♪That’s how a princess should be

GROUP 3:
♪ No, No way

GROUP 4:
♪That’s how a princess should be

GROUP 3:
♪ No, No way

ALL CHORUS AND INÉS:
♪That’s how a princess should be

You can’t always be free


The bit I'm stuck on is:

♪There’s no, no way
She’s gonna be a princess like we say
She does whatever she thinks is okay
[--- - - ---- ] (9 syllables)

Here's a rough take of me singing it: http://vocaroo.com/i/s157ZUAzJ8Xx

It can't use way, say, day, away, fiancé, bay, okay, pray, or stay; as I've already used those
I may have to rewrite a line in order to accommodate the new line. If it gets this finally finished, then I'm not complaining.

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I think I've got it:

There's no, no way
She's gonna be a princess like we say
She never wants to listen or obey
She just does what she thinks is okay

http://vocaroo.com/i/s1fm1qriPv8P

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